Thema: English Vortrag "stretchen" :D

Hi everyone!!

Ich muss am Dienstag einen kleinen Vortrag über eine Sehenswürdigkeit in LOndon halten.

Wie es der Zufall wollte musste ich die Millenium Bridge nehmen.

Okay also ziel ist es ca. 5-10 Minuten zu reden.
Auf den Vortrag den ich zusammengeschnipselt habe komm ich aber maximal mit Pausen auf 2:30 Minuten...

Hier der Vortrag: (es sollte so sein als ob man eine Stadtrundfahrt macht )

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Hello everyone,
here on the right we see the Millenium Bridge.
It leads over the Themse, as you might see.
The Millenium Bridge is a "Walkers Only" bridge, that means that you will never see a car or a motorcycle cross this bridge.
This bridge is 325 metres long and it can carry up to 2000 tons!!!
That means that 5000 people can stay on it at the same time.

The works startet in 1998, and the project cost 18 million pounds. 2 Million more than they wanted to spend.
They opened the bridge in 2000, but it was immedially closed because it started to vibrate when much people walked on it. Those people complained about that and so it was closed for 2 years.
Since the re-opening in 2002 there are no problems anymore.

In the north the bridge leads to Southwark, in the west to the borough of southwark.
You can see the St. Paul Cathedral when ur walking on it, which is also a very nice and big attraction.

At last but not least the bridge took part in the movie "Harry Potter and the Half Blood Prince.

Was kann ich da noch einbauen oder verlängern :S

Dankeeee

x FaTJoE

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Hello everyone,
here on the right we see the Millenium Bridge.
It leads over the Themse, as you might see.
The Millenium Bridge is a "Walkers Only" bridge, that means that you will never see a car or a motorcycle cross this bridge.
This bridge is 325 metres long and it can carry up to 2000 tons!!!
That means that 5000 people can stay on it at the same time.

The works startet in 1998, and the project cost 18 million pounds. 2 Million more than they wanted to spend.
They opened the bridge in 2000, but it was immedially closed because it started to vibrate when much people walked on it. Those people complained about that and so it was closed for 2 years.
Since the re-opening in 2002 there are no problems anymore.

In the north the bridge leads to Southwark, in the west to the borough of southwark.
You can see the St. Paul Cathedral when ur walking on it, which is also a very nice and big attraction.

At last but not least the bridge took part in the movie "Harry Potter and the Half Blood Prince.

vielleicht kannst du noch folgendes einbauen:

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The bridge is owned and maintained by the Bridge House Estates
Londoners nicknamed the bridge the "Wobbly Bridge"
The bridge was temporarily closed on 18 January 2007, during the Kyrill storm due to strong winds and a risk of pedestrians being blown off the bridge.

hab ich (was für ein wunder) aus Wikipedia
such dir doch da noch einiges raus

Im Allgemeinen würde ich dir empfehlen so einen Vortrag durch etwas ausgebautere Sätze und insbesonders durch Einleitung zu Unterpunkten zu strecken.
Zum Beispiel so Dinge wie "Now, let me tell you some interesting facts about it's costs..."

Ich empfehle dir englische Seiten zur Informationsbeschaffung zu verwenden, also z.B. den von Wirkkos geposteten Wiki-Link. Ist einfacher, gleich in der Sprache zu bleiben, und nicht herumübersetzen zu müssen.

Einbauen könntest du noch wie die Brücke zu ihrem Namen kam, wie die Konstruktion genauer aussieht, deine genannten Punkte noch mehr ausschmücken, vielleicht ein paar Bilder dazu zeigen.

Und am Ende nochmal Fehler korrigieren, da haben sich ein paar eingeschlichen.

Was mir damals geholfen hat, war noch eine eigene Meinung zum Thema beizutragen.
Am besten am Ende deines Vortrages.

Also einfach:

In my opinion, the Millenium Bridge is/is not ...

So hab ich mir damals noch 1-2 Minuten geholt